Monday, January 4, 2010
The thing that my cousin's did to me over break
I was at my cousin's and they throw a big party at new year's. We stayed up till 3 in the morning I was getting sleepy and I didn't want to go to sleep because everybody was their and I was thinking that they where going to do something stupid to me and i was scared. I went to sleep at five in the morning and when I wok up I went to the bathroom and I didn't see any thing wrong with me until I saw that they shaved my mustache I was so mad at my cousin's and I was going to kick their ass but I went to my house and when I got there my dad said that I was a joto because I didn't have a mustache. And that's what my cousin's did to me over break.
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Mistakes I found are the following:
ReplyDelete1. In the first sentence, there shouldn't be an apostrophe in "years".
2. In the second sentence, you should chane "we" to "I", or specify who the other people are when you say "we".
3. In the second sentence, "their" should be changed to "there".
4. Make sure all your "I-s" are capitalized.
Those are some main mistakes I found. There are more but I think I'll stop here.
Aside from the mistakes, nice blog!